Danny File
Sept. 29, 2013
AP Lit.
Mr.
Lavender
Transcendentalist Assignment
“Trust
thyself: every heart vibrates to that iron sting.” Ralph Waldo Emerson wrote
this in his essay Self-Reliance,
published in 1841. He was stating that people need to trust their own judgments
and not rely on those of others; for that is the only way we can continue
living. There is nothing wrong with getting opinions or assistance from someone
else, but we all must make our own decisions. After all, no one can live life
for you; you have to do it yourself. This idea is one I would apply to my own
life. Whether it’s at home or at school, I need to trust in who I am and what I
am capable of.
In some
cases, people lose so much faith in themselves that they start to mimic others,
thinking that their lives must be better. Emerson addressed this idea in his essay,
Self-Reliance, when he said, “There
is a time in every man’s education when he arrives at the conviction that envy
is ignorance; that imitation is suicide...” Envy is ignorance because it shows how little
we are aware of what we have or who we are. Instead of being grateful for our
many talents and gifts, we envy those of others. Imitation is suicide because
the more we act like someone else, the less we exist as our own person. The old
life starts to be replaced by the new. In other words, we kill who we really
are.
Every now
and then, I find myself guilty of the crimes that Emerson depicts. Sometimes, I’ll
look at the grades, fitness, or good looks of my peers and wish I had those for
myself. I am ignorant of the many blessing I have, and become envious. Additionally,
I will sometimes try to mimic the attitude, actions, or personality of someone
else. I feel that I would have more friends if I acted like them, so I stop
acting like myself. I need to look at my life and thank God for the many things
I have and the person that I am, instead of becoming someone I’m not.
Emerson was
not the only writer to address the idea of personal identity; Henry David
Thoreau, another transcendentalist, gave his perspective on the matter. In 1854
Thoreau published Walden, in which he
said, “I went to the woods because I wished to live deliberately, to front only
the essential facts of life, and see if I could not learn what it had to teach,
and not, when I came to die, discover that I had not lived.” (This started out
as a journal, so the “I” in the story is Thoreau.) He is saying that he had to
get out of all the distractions of society to truly live life and learn its
meaning. Thoreau later says, “Our life is frittered away by detail,” and also, “Keep
your accounts on your thumb-nail,” He is implying that life is not lived to its
true potential when we add so much extra detail. All the activities of the day
should be able to fit on my thumb-nail. With so much extra material, it can be
hard to look past the smoke and mirrors to see the true picture.
This is definitely
something that I have a problem with. It would take hundreds of thumb-nails to
keep track of everything I have on my schedule. According to Thoreau, I’m not
really living life. Unless you’ve lived life to its full, then you haven’t
found your full potential. Could it be true that these many details are hiding my
true identity and keeping me from my potential? To reveal who I really am, I need
to dig through and remove all the clutter.
“I celebrate
myself……My tongue, every atom of my blood, form'd from this soil, this air, born
here of parents born here from parents the same, and their parents the same, I,
now thirty-seven years old in perfect health begin, hoping to cease not till
death.” This quote was written by Walt Whitman in his essay Song of Myself. Whitman is able to look
at the aspects of his life and say “I celebrate.” He sees who he is and what he’s
become, and he’s proud. This can, however, be dangerous when it leads to
extreme pride, self-righteousness, and a sense of superiority. We do not want
to put ourselves above everyone else, but we do want to “celebrate” ourselves and
who God has made us to be.
There are
times when people will say things about me and it makes me feel depressed and
unsure of myself. I’ll look at myself and at my life and feel like nobody. For some
extreme cases, people get so depressed that they will commit suicide. I need to
be able to follow Whitman’s example and be proud of who I am. There are two
sides to this: I want to proud of my life, and I don’t want to do anything I’m
not proud of.
Whitman, Emerson,
and Thoreau were great men with great ideas. They, and all other transcendentalists,
gave the world a new way of thinking. Many of their ideas can and should be
applied to our lifestyles. I believe, however, that the subjects of identity
and trusting yourself are some of the most important that were addressed. I am
going to listen to their advice and apply it to my life. By trusting myself, by
being my own person, by removing the distraction in my life, and by being proud
of who I am, I am going to become a better person.
Danny,
ReplyDeleteThis essay in my opinion is a very well written and straight forward for a first draft. Wish I could write essays in this fashion I always end up getting to fancy and complicated. Paragraph 3 in my opinion is very well done, it made the paragraphs before relate to a life as we know it easier to understand as you related it to your life. Your comparisons through out the essay make the topic much lighter and easier to understand. Your conclusion is a little to much of a summary, I kind of thought it was just telling me what you had told me before in a shortened manner. Other than that the essay is very good and I enjoyed reading your essays. May have sparked a few ideas for my essay... is that suicide?
-Morgan Osborne
Glad you liked it. And no, I don't think it's suicide.
DeleteDanny that is a really nicely structured essay. You followed a super defined outline really well and it was easy to see where your ideas were coming from and how you were able to interlace them with the writings of Emerson, Thoreau and Whitman. I like that after each initial idea you wrote about your own feeling and how it applies to your life. If I were to make a suggestion though, I would say you need to dive a little deeper into your own experience relations. This essay would make a really great comparison of the writers, but its a little to rigid to entice the reader in the way that creative writing allows. If you are able to pick out one experience where you really defied the belief of being an individual and actually conformed in some way, I think that would help add some flavor to your essay.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the advice. I'll definitely consider it.
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ReplyDeleteI liked the intro
The idea in paragraph 2 is really good, maybe just tweak your first sentence though so it flows better from paragraph 1
I really liked this essay though. I think you did a really good job of taking the writers thoughts and putting them into your own words. I think you really got their message. Maybe one thing you could do though is add a little spice here and there. Its very straight forward, which is nice, but maybe adding more detail wouldn’t hurt. Otherwise good work ☺
A little more spice huh? Not one of my strong points, but I'll give it a shot. Thanks.
DeleteI agree with those above who find this first pass very engaging (you use the quotations well in triggering your own 'riffs' on the issues raised). I'm anxious to read and respond (more thoughtfully) to the draft you turn in on Friday!
ReplyDelete--Mr. L.